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 vGl-CoW Belgium. November 09 2012 01:06. Posts 8270 | Profile Blog # |
+ Show Spoiler [First-Time Readers, Click Here] +What is TL Noir?TL Noir is a detective story about a dapper Moderator named Cow who works in TL City. He is tasked with hunting down a troll who is terrorizing TL's populace. Join him on his perilous search through the dark streets of TL and be prepared to experience mystery, adventure, suspense, horror and many, many other intense words. You can start reading here: Part 1
Dusk sets in as I reach the Dota District. I'm almost completely out of breath. Being a moderator isn't usually this stressful. I can't even really remember the last time I broke a sweat, and now I'm panting like a dog in a butt store.
Dota District is the newest part of town, built recently to accommodate TL's seemingly never-ending influx of fresh citizens. Somehow, it quickly turned into a ghetto. Looming dark structures tower over three parallel traffic lanes. There doesn't seem to be a set direction of traffic, or people simply don't care. They drive wildly in both directions, as if they're purposely trying to crash into each other. Everybody's angry.
The strips of land between the traffic lanes are covered with big oaks and a thick, almost impermeable brush. The idea was to create an inviting, natural green zone by planting some trees and bushes. Great for the kids and such. Too bad nobody actually bothered to do any gardening. Nature quickly went its way and flooded every available inch with vines, leaves and thorny branches. It's now known as the Jungle. I don't even want to know what goes on in there. I just try not to think about it.
The apartment complex I'm looking for is right on the outskirts of the District. Hot Bid should be in there. I hope he's all right. The troll said he'd be the next victim, but then again, trolls aren't exactly known for their veracity. It could have simply been part of his plan to mess with Kiett's head. Still, I have a bad feeling about this.
The main entrance door is locked. Of course. Heaven forbid that I should catch a lucky break for once. I move around the corner, find an empty window in the darkness and climb through. I find myself in an unfurnished room. After a minute of feeling up the wall like I'm checking it for breast cancer, I manage to locate the light switch and flick it. Nothing. Awesome. Just moonlight it is, then.
Carefully placing my steps, I inch out of the room and through a corridor. I can't hear anything, but I quietly sneak on. Not planning on letting myself get ambushed in this skeleton of a building, that's for sure. Moonlight falling through the empty doorways faintly illuminates a concrete stairwell at the end of the corridor, a gaping maw patiently waiting to crush me with its pale grey jaws. Pretty scary. I can't turn back now, though. Up I go.
Reaching the top of the stairs, I pause and hold my breath. Did I just hear something? Yes. It sounds like a faint sobbing, coming from around the corner. My hands begin to tremble as the adrenaline kicks in. There's definitely somebody here. As quietly as I can, I shuffle towards the corner and peek my head around it. I see artificial light shining out of one of the rooms. The sobbing sounds more clear now, interspersed with soft, pitiful moans. Could it be Hot Bid? Whoever it is, the sound's coming from that room, there's no doubt about it. I don't hear any movement. It sounds like there's only a single person. I have to take my chance here. Still careful not to make a sound, I move up to the doorway and tilt my head to get a view of the room. My heart skips a beat when I spot a figure on the ground. It's Hot Bid.
He's sitting against the back wall, softly weeping, arms resting on his knees, his head sunk low, bathing in the cold white light of a construction lamp. His wrists are shackled to the wall. He seems broken. I quickly scan the rest of the room. Empty. I resist the urge to rush in. Something's not right here. It feels like a trap. I have to get Hot Bid's attention. He'll know if I'm walking into an ambush.
“Psst!”
No reaction.
“Pssst!”
Still nothing. Damnit. He can't hear me over the sound of his own crying.
I slowly pick up a pebble-sized piece of loose concrete off the floor and throw it at him. It hits him on the shoulder. He startles and looks up at me, wide-eyed. It takes him a couple of seconds to realize who I am.
“Cow!”
He almost yells it out, in a hushed half-shout. I motion him to be more quiet.
I whisper, “Is it safe to come in?”
“Yes, yes, quickly! He left a few hours ago. Please, get me out of here! The key is on the floor, by the lamp. He left it just out of my reach. Fucker thought it was hilarious. I swear, when I find this piece of shit...”
I spot the key, walk in, grab it and I start unlocking the shackles.
“Relax, Hot Bid, we'll have you out of here in no time. There!” The shackles make a loud clanking noise as they slip off his wrists and onto the floor.
“Oh, thank you! Oh God!” He grabs my hands. “Thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you... Sucker.”
Before I can respond, my vision explodes with a bright white flash and I feel an intense pain in my forehead. My knees buckle and I drop to the ground. Did he just... headbutt me?
– TO BE CONTINUED –
Last edit: 2012-11-18 02:19:03
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| Qbek Poland. November 09 2012 01:18. Posts 4277 | Profile # |
Got anything against the dota people????
Also I completely freaked myself out by reading hotbid's lines in his voice, I don't normally do that 
Enjoying it so far  |
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 Nyovne Netherlands. November 09 2012 02:21. Posts 17165 | Profile # |
| This is so good, I hope you keep going Cowface :D. |
| | For remember, that in the end, some are born to live, others born to die. I belong to those last, born to burn, born to cry. For I shall remain alone... forsaken. |
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| StarStruck November 09 2012 02:23. Posts 18384 | Profile # |
The only thing that would make this series better is illustrations!
MSPaint ahoy! |
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| GhandiEAGLE United States. November 09 2012 02:24. Posts 4016 | Profile Blog # |
I knew it! HOTBID IS TEH TROLL
I was wondering, because I didn't think there was any way to troll Hot_Bid, so the troll either was gonna get rejected by Hot_Bid, or the troll WAS Hot_Bid.Last edit: 2012-11-09 02:31:06 |
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| surfinbird1 Germany. November 09 2012 03:18. Posts 999 | Profile # |
| Damn you Hot_Bid. I knew this was coming. Time to get rid of him, Cow. |
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| OpticalShot Canada. November 09 2012 05:34. Posts 5929 | Profile Blog # |
Ctrl+F "ass"
[0 of 0]
... disappointing. |
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| solidbebe Netherlands. November 09 2012 06:20. Posts 3235 | Profile # |
| weew cliffhanger much, part 6 gogogoogogo! |
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| Jaaaaasper United States. November 09 2012 07:22. Posts 2433 | Profile Blog # |
| freaking awesome, but i miss ass jokes. |
| | Sounds like your relationships suck, although probably not literally.- kwark Best part of waking up, KwarK banning rape apologists in my cup! I guess you could say... *puts on sunglasses* ... they were asking for it. colaboy and Kasaraki |
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| Shock710 Australia. November 09 2012 08:55. Posts 2926 | Profile Blog # |
lol
I broke a sweat, and now I'm panting like a dog in a butt store.
thats a great image lol, and i knew there was something wrong when hotbid was crying i mean no way could a troll get him and break him!! :O but still didnt think hotbid would turn on cow O_O MOAR!!!!! NEED MORE BRAINS NOIR |
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 shostakovich Brazil. November 09 2012 11:50. Posts 719 | Profile Blog # | |
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| Aerisky United States. November 09 2012 15:38. Posts 9248 | Profile Blog # |
Awesome :D
Continually improving your writing as well, nice job cow |
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| Nyovne Netherlands. November 09 2012 17:29. Posts 17165 | Profile # |
Hah nice find, made me waste another our on youtube too :D. |
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| shostakovich Brazil. November 10 2012 02:06. Posts 719 | Profile Blog # |
On November 09 2012 17:29 Nyovne wrote:Hah nice find, made me waste another our on youtube too :D.
A well wasted hour I hope. This band is so cool. They were a black metal band before. |
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| Kiett United States. November 10 2012 03:15. Posts 3603 | Profile Blog # |
aww nooo :c
i'll save u cow ♥ |
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| Qbek Poland. November 10 2012 23:26. Posts 4277 | Profile # | |
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| vGl-CoW Belgium. November 11 2012 00:16. Posts 8270 | Profile Blog # |
As always, many thanks for the comments, guys! Glad you're enjoying it.
On November 09 2012 05:34 OpticalShot wrote:
Ctrl+F "ass"
[0 of 0]
... disappointing.
On November 09 2012 07:22 Jaaaaasper wrote:
freaking awesome, but i miss ass jokes.
I made a butt store joke. Butt is a synonym for ass, so I consider my quota filled!
Cool, very appropriate mood. I'll add a link to the top so people can choose to play this as background music while reading. Thanks!
On November 10 2012 03:15 Kiett wrote:
aww nooo :c
i'll save u cow ♥
Your brother is being a real jerk ![[image loading]](http://i.imgur.com/2VuFt.png?1) |
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| shostakovich Brazil. November 11 2012 06:19. Posts 719 | Profile Blog # |
On November 10 2012 23:26 Qbek wrote:Thx for that music man!
My pleasure. And there's much more from this band. Try Destroying Angels or On Demon Wings. Just after I discovered these tracks, I instantly bought the CD.Last edit: 2012-11-11 06:30:33 |
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| Rick Deckard December 10 2012 10:37. Posts 90 | Profile # |
| Enjoying the series, and looking forward to the next part. |
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