 SpiralArchitect United States. November 15 2008 03:35. Posts 2116 | Profile Blog | |
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 Zoler Sweden. November 15 2008 03:37. Posts 3942 | Profile Blog |
haha awesome! 
I agree DTs are lame |
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 village_idiot November 15 2008 03:40. Posts 1726 | Profile Blog |
I once thought of a haiku in my head. It involved Dark Templar, drones and swearing.
Don't remember it anymore though. |
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 Durak Canada. November 15 2008 03:41. Posts 1312 | Profile Blog |
| Nice poem. This is the exact reason I always send an overlord to my third. Screw protoss. |
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 Raithed China. November 15 2008 03:50. Posts 6746 | Profile Blog | |
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| Ozarugold November 15 2008 04:02. Posts 1829 | Profile Blog |
Lol~ awesome.
Freakin' Dark Templars... |
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 Therapy United States. November 15 2008 04:35. Posts 109 | Profile Blog |
| this is why i always try to position my overlords strategically in the beginning so theres one where I'm going to expand. I forget a lot tho =( Fucking dts |
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 CDRdude United States. November 15 2008 04:50. Posts 4347 | Profile Blog |
| The followup to this poem should be titled "Ventral Sacs" |
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 Pokebunny United States. November 15 2008 05:40. Posts 1890 | Profile Blog | |
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 GHOSTCLAW United States. November 15 2008 05:43. Posts 10240 | Profile Blog |
| Nice poem. DT's are awesome when you use them, and suck when they're used against you. |
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 micronesia United States. November 15 2008 05:57. Posts 9999 | Profile Blog |
I really enjoyed it. I'm not expert on poetry but I do have one comment. As I read it, the syllables were mostly lining up in my head, but there were some lines where I thought shortening or lengthening them by one or two syllables would line them up better with the previous/following rhyming line. Just for an example...
"Alt+Q+Q out of this horrid excuse of a game
Retreat to my bed to cry the night in shame"
The way I read this in my head is...
"Alt Q Q out of this hor- rid ex- cuse of a game
Re- treat to my bed to cry the night in shame"
Note how the first line has 13 syllables while the second has 11. An example of a possible solution:
"Alt Q Q out of this horr- i- ble game"
"Back to my bed to cry the night in shame"
Lines up with 10 and 10... honestly doesn't seem like the ideal fix either because a sort of emphasis seems to get put on 'the' but you get the idea I hope.
Is this just personal preference? |
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 conCentrate9 United States. November 15 2008 07:13. Posts 413 | Profile Blog |
| Meter is supposed to match up like that unless you are trying to direct readers to a specific point, then you may feel comfortable to have a nonparallel meter. |
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 Tensai176 Canada. November 15 2008 07:13. Posts 1932 | Profile Blog |
| Lol once you talked about a unit that you hated, somehow i knew it was teh dt... |
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 renegade_zerg Korea (South). November 15 2008 08:07. Posts 524 | Profile Blog |
| Someone nominate this man for the Nobel Prize in Literature. |
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 heyoka United States. November 15 2008 10:15. Posts 1720 | Profile Blog |
This inspired me to write a haiku
Corsairs and DTs
Friends forever, boundless love
Drones and ovies; dead |
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